we sat, as I imagine
you might have envied,
ten feet above the shoreline
bracing ourselves against
ridgeline winds with
whiskey warmed in cider
and watching the trout rise
in sudden ripples to
pick off the new hatch
and now returning to learn
that you’ve gone – startling
as a hook in the mouth
© Sarah Whiteley
Sarah, that is most effective. The last stanza is itself startling, and comes after calm and tranquil preliminaries, just as required. The poem is very touching too.
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